The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Nora, Nourishing
Nora gets a job nannying for infant twins. Alas, the twins' mother, Philippa, has much bigger plans for Nora. Bigger and milkier...
Average Scores:

Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
first of great story, loved reading it. so you know I say this to be helpful. please ignore if not helpful

1. it seemed like the characters could have freeked out a little more. for example her boyfriend is very trusting to let her walk back into the house alone. I think if it was me I would either be right there beside her or had their phones on speaker so as to be able to be outside the influence of magic not that it would of helped.

2. I would have also included a line about how they had interviewed 10 or so other applicants before finding the right candidate as it seams unlikely that she would have found the perfect wet nurse on the first try unless she used magic

great story, loved reading it. 
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Great premise and well written throughout. Like others I hope there is a sequel.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

great story- cant wait for more adventures.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

So the Sketcher's Wife is your opus. This is a tiny masterpiece. The Fur Elise to the Fifth Symphony. I do wish it continued into the actual babysitting but I get how that might feel repetitive. Your work is awesome and I worry about bloating your ego so much that you head to Smashwords or Amazon and leave us free loving mooches in the dark. Keep up the excellent work.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Awesome story, wish it was longer or a sequel

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Pretty good, and just vaguely sinister. Are you going to keep going with this or was it just a one-off?

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Really fantastic! Would love a sequel!

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