The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Power: Day 4 a
James give the bad news to the girls that the party is a no go.  The girls doesn't take the news well & Ming's mother gets involved to make sure the party happens.  This spells trouble for James.
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Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

your imagination is wonderfully perverse. I really enjoy these types of stories. Your technical skills are improving. Try reading your writing out loud it helped me with the technical parts in my college writings b/c if it sounded awkward it probably was.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

AGreed with the others, this is turning out to be a fun series. My only suggestion is that you may want to have someone else proofread your stories since the tenses and phrases can be a little odd.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Very interesting story. I eagerly wait for the next chapter...

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

This story is really starting to get good! I cant wait for the next part.

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