James give the bad news to the girls that the party is a no go. The girls doesn't take the news well & Ming's mother gets involved to make sure the party happens. This spells trouble for James.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 3.50
- Characters: 4.50
- Technical: 3.75
myobpolo
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
your imagination is wonderfully perverse. I really enjoy these types of stories. Your technical skills are improving. Try reading your writing out loud it helped me with the technical parts in my college writings b/c if it sounded awkward it probably was.
DarkHeart
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
AGreed with the others, this is turning out to be a fun series. My only suggestion is that you may want to have someone else proofread your stories since the tenses and phrases can be a little odd.
TD
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Very interesting story. I eagerly wait for the next chapter...
Blamandude
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This story is really starting to get good! I cant wait for the next part.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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