The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

DD-Red Shoes
Pixel Research
A computer scientist makes a significant breakthough. Problems and pleasures follow when his son hacks into his system and uses his research file as a basis to his morphing assignment.
Average Scores:

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 1

Lots of grammar and mechanical errors but nice story setup and idea.

Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 1

Decent story, but the grammar was unbearable. I couldn't read it all.

benji dude
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

The odd writting mistake but a good story, the characters could have been developed a bit more I think. The only real problem I have with story is that they know that this new computer program has a big, possible dangerious, side effect and yet he just includes in his report that the files must be encrypted as soon as possible, doesn't sound very lickely to me, maybe that's just me.

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