A handsome man, finds himself the victim of a strange new affliction called "Second puberty" and falls prey to the more "extreme" and curvy side of its effects.
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Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.00
- BE: 2.00
- Characters: 1.67
- Technical: 3.33
THEM
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 4
Short but not sweet. Theoretically handsome dude with little background becomes a curvy but plain girl in a bathroom.
jmsnowy10
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
When I read the title I had an unfortunate suspicion that this was a rip off of the excellent Ed Millers Second Puberty. The second I started reading and the main characters name Mark was exactly the same as Eds, and the doctors name was just changed to fit the same letter, I knew it was a poor homage. The story is extremely short but the decision to put it in the second person is one that detracts from it. The writing could improve, and either being in first or third person can help explore characters more. A second puberty should not be done in the matter of minutes.
I hope this doesnt discourage you because I love TG content on this site. In the meantime, dear reader, please check out Ed Millers Second Puberty, its definitely a pinnacle that we should all reach for.
jmsnowy10
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
When I read the title I had an unfortunate suspicion that this was a rip off of the excellent Ed Millers Second Puberty. The second I started reading and the main characters name Mark was exactly the same as Eds, and the doctors name was just changed to fit the same letter, I knew it was a poor homage. The story is extremely short but the decision to put it in the second person is one that detracts from it. The writing could improve, and either being in first or third person can help explore characters more. A second puberty should not be done in the matter of minutes.
I hope this doesnt discourage you because I love TG content on this site. In the meantime, dear reader, please check out Ed Millers Second Puberty, its definitely a pinnacle that we should all reach for.
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