This is a story heavily influenced by Recolonization by Nok Nok (Highly recommend). This is the first chapter of this BE Sci-fi Epic! Its about a normal guy who hates his life. That is, until he gets abducted by an alien ship and his life forever changes. This is a lore chapter to set up the story, so there's no direct BE, but it is foreshadowed. I have big plans for this project. Future chapters will contain BE, pregnancy, lactation, and more! This my first time writing so any feedback is greatly appreciated!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.67
- BE: 3.67
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 4.67
ktc
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
The writing is no masterpiece, but for a first time story it's totally fine. The premise is very commonly done but even in that regard you already downplayed the originality. The scifantasy setting, average dude protagonist, and almost literal blank slate that is Venus which is only half true, as she clearly showed little bits of character sprinkled between the mind controlish nature present in the story and her abilties leave a lot of room for future installments. The established narrative presents many interesting capabilities and the ship is huge, so I look forward to this latest installment of Harem trope goodness because you're not trying to reinvent the wheel and that's been made clear enough. What kind of women will we end up with? How crazy are the nano bot transformations capable of getting? How big will Venus end up? Only time will tell.
Moonpotrz
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great start! I am looking forward to the preg details
Oarrhocks
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Very nice exposition and set up!! Looking forward to more! Keep it up!
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