Jake has longed to date his friend Megan all his life and now has his chance. The problem? Somehow her younger sister has become attached to his Supergirl fantasies, her looks and abilities growing closer to those of his dream woman every time he sees her.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.60
- BE: 3.60
- Characters: 4.60
- Technical: 5.00
SomeDude
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
So on the minus side, this didn't...really feel like a BE story. Or even a boob story. Breasts are mentioned, and they do grow, but they are very much not the star of the show and the description of them when they finally do get big is a bit vague.
On the plus side is literally everything else. The writing is strong technically accomplished I only noticed one typo, with a clear voice, vivid descriptions, and sharp dialogue. The three main characters feel sharply drawn, with consistent and coherent personalities.
And the actual erotic content is mindblowing. The story is a very long tease but when it gets where it's going, it's dynamite. I haven't vibed this hard with a story in a long time. I only wish it were longer, that we'd gotten to see more of Maria's power and cruelty.
Boris
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
cwmoss
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
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Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
This was well written as always, but I think there could've been some more exploration of Maria's mindset as she goes through these changes. Ashley's Envy was great for that and I think something similar could've helped make things feel a little less rushed.
JustAReader
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Liked it.
But the end was a bit fast in my eyes and I would have preferred it, if she would have made it a bit more subtle like increasing his libido to superhuman levels so only she could satisfy him or something like that but thats just my cup of tea
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