A Madam Materia commission. Thirty years after a social revolution altered the very structures of a nation, women are visions of extreme perfection. Men on the other hand have been divided into two castes, those with the confidence and charisma to be Alphas, and those who never grow out of being just boys: the betas. Follow the story of Eric, a boy wanting to take on the world before the opportunity is swept away from him, and he starts on the path to becoming a cuck to his own life.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 1.60
- BE: 1.60
- Characters: 1.73
- Technical: 3.13
OFB Reader for 15 years
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
Extremely disappointing work from an otherwise competent BE writer.
None of the characters are likable and Eric only warrants pity for his suffering. The Be scene what little of it there is is bland and unsatisfying. And the story seems to go no where with a seemingly random ending.
This is clearly one of the worst 5 stories on this site and in my mind is inappropriate to the readership here. If you possibly can, I'd suggest that you withdraw it and perhaps submit to the Svengali Mind Control site where it would at least be germane to that readership.
Hmm
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Honestly, this story isn't badly written, but it seems like a complete misunderstanding of your fanbase. It'd probably fit better on a Mind ControlCuckIncel forum than here.
antifa
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
the description is bad enough. fuck this story. please delete it.
Anonymouse
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 4
Most madam materia stuff has bad endings, but this is just from bad to worse. Every single character is an asshole to the main character because he is labeled a beta. MCs own family treat him like a slave. I kept reading hoping that at some point MC would be treated like a person, but it randomly ends with a giant orgy from the perspective of the only person not taking part but being forced to watch because he is a SLAVE.
I expect Hubris to befall MCs in materias work, but in this story, MC is a hard worker and not a slut, so he gets to be an unloved slave for the rest of his life.
Oh, and there is only one BE scene, written from the perspective of someone who doesnt want to be watching.
Roid Abuser
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 5
I hated this story, but it is wellwritten, at least at the first. I stopped reading.
It is an interesting concept, however. Be much more interesting for this forum, if written with an Alpha as a protagonist, perhaps one who grows into being an Alpha with a lot more BE, male muscle growth, PE, etc.
I rate how I want
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
If I think the story is trash, it gets 1s. Anyone who doesnt like it can suck it
Boris
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very good writing as always. Dark storie but enjoyable. Not much BE description but it s suggested. Thanks man.
PS please guys try to be more nice with the authors. Put a 1 is just trolling.
Anonymous
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
No
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
One of the worst stories I've read on this site. It's a cuck fetish story with some BE thrown in. Belongs more on a cuck board than here and is ultimately a huge bonerkill for anyone who comes here for, you know, BE stuff.
Neckbeard Deathcult
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 4
Not a breast expansion story. This is incel shit with a sprinkling of BE. I suppose you could get off on it if you like being humiliated, but it doesn't belong on this archive. Also frankly disrespectful given the Madam's other work.
Someguy
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I think this pile on is excessive.. story has clear BE, and is well written and put together. Glad to see it posted here. Yes it is a cuck story, but that's clearly stated in the description!
Boobityboob
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
While your writing is still good I dont think this was the right place to post this story and judging by the other responses most people agree. BE is meant to be the main focus and not a small part of it.
GeoffK
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
There's some BE, but the story is more depressing than sexy. Eric gets badly screwed here and the story never cuts him a break. Nobody is at all likable or sympathetic.
Guest
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 4
Really the BE is hinted at constantly then it's over followed by more cucking. I read all the way through hoping that Eric would do something. Steal his sisters growth? Re el and end up an alpha.
Torque
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 4
Not sure what is supposed to be sexy about this. Better off in a cuck fetish forum than the BEA.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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