Marissa's idiot boyfriend rubs the lamp. What could possibly go wrong?
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 3.40
- Characters: 3.40
- Technical: 4.40
Rak
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Wow. This really went for it, and that's impressive and admirable. I don't know if I actually liked any of the characters involved, and the BE is certainly a side note, but it's delightfully imaginative and enjoyable.
Kanodin
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 5
Don't know why you wrote the boyfriend as such a stupid pariah. Was kind of distracting.
CrashO
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Eh, was alright. Needed a lot more in the descriptions department, hard to wrap my head around what was happening at any given moment, relied on a lot of dialogue, but the dialogue was a bit too stiff and unnatural for that to work. Keep writing, but this was coherent if a bit bland.
Oz1eye
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Loved this story, the BE was more or less incidental, but that actually worked better than it being the central theme. Loved the denouement.
FrigOfFury
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
This ticked a lot of boxes for me, and at least the shitty mortals got their just desserts. I also thought the playful writing style was well done. I really didnt like the djinns, but thats a personal taste thing and the author should absolutely disregard it. Well done!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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