A detailed story where a woman discovers a box of chocolates that make her expand whenever she eats one. It's what she's always wanted, except for one problem... she is stuck in the office, quickly outgrowing her clothes.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.33
- BE: 3.67
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 2.67
Anon
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I think what the other guy was trying to describe albeit in a very dickish way is that the small paragraphs and lack of indentation make this read more like a news article than an actual story, but this minor complaint is ultimately irrelevant in the face of this extremely detailed and wellwritten story. I really enjoyed it, and look forward to more work from you!
Bruh
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Guest
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Author has no idea how Paragraphs work.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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