Zara suddenly starts expanding while with her boyfriend in his car. She does not know what caused the expansion, and it swiftly gets out of hand as she tries to hide it from anyone who might see!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.43
- BE: 4.86
- Characters: 4.57
- Technical: 4.71
kabut
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
This has to be one of my favorite stories on here. The description of just how large Zara became was incredible. Perhaps a bit too fastpaced at times, but overall a great read. And just a personal preference, but I would love a followup on the pregnancy.
Hanny
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Wow! This was great! I thought Zara's character development both physically and within her personality were written very well, especially in how believable the romance between her and Jay was. I loved how she tried to adjust to her expanded body too, the part where she tried to do her ballet again was a joy to read. And the sex scene was probably one of the best I've read in an expansion story. My only real complaint is that the growth was a bit too fast for my liking, since I tend to lean more towards slower growth over a few days. Still, I hope to see more in the future!
NtGrt
Overall= 2, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Not a fantastic tale. The main character had very strange hangups and the story just felt flat.
BB47
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Loved the expansion. Wished it took longer. Also, I had trouble visualizing a girl that big, being able to move around so freely.
greatpersonhooray
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Absolutely loved it even though I'm usually into the slower stuff. Please write more, especially with lactation!
Moreplz
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Just excellent. I hope you keep writing because your handle on descriptions is excellent. 55. One thing, and this is really more of a personal preference than a critique, is to actually echo the feedback of the first review, where it'd be cool if it was slower, or if it paused at certain points in the growth. I know some of the audience love to see the reality bending proportions, but you may expand pun intended your audience if you spent more time to all stages of the process, including when it's still getting going.
GeoffK
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
A very wellwritten and enjoyable story with goodquality descriptions, likable characters and no technical issues. It did feel a bit rushed, especially towards the end, and I would have liked to see it go a bit longer, especially between the sex scene and the final scene. That would have provided a chance to see how she adapts to her new body and life.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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