The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

MysteryGuy9215
Big Talk
Two roommates bicker and strange things seem to happen as a result...
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Eddie
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Nice work. I got into it, wanting Carol to shut up. Mysterious light. Cute ending. Real people messing with unreal stuff.
Dranon
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I loved it. Im a big fan of these sort of playfullyNC transformations. Especially when the real life ramifications dawn on those involved. I really enjoyed! I too wish it were a bit more drawn out and detail, but thats just wanting more 
HourglassHourglass
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I liked it, but why not both AG and BE in the same person? Any way we can get a hourglass edit? Just felt like the story didn't reach its potential. I actually liked the pace of the changes.
Daichi
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
The main problem is not the set up, but the fact it was more of poof style changes once the wishes were made rather than the gradual build up.
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