The serum takes hold of Persephone's body, and her breasts begin to grow, along with her thirst for more.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.83
- BE: 4.50
- Characters: 4.17
- Technical: 4.33
GeoffK
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
A great new installment. I can't wait to read the rest.
One criticism she grows to a Jcup at her bra fitting, but seems smaller at her next day at work. This is a little confusing. Even so, a great story.
FleshFan
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
a lot of BE, impressive how you managed to put so much different BEs into that, really awesome!
Herne
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
I like where this is going, looking forward to continuation!rnI just wish there will be more description of the characters I don't know what the heroine's hair or body looks like, or how tall she is.rnOn the positive side, I like how she is this modest librarian type on the outside and worried about growing too big, but giving in to her inner desires to have insanely big breasts.rnKeep up the good work!rn
clibretto
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Still enoying the story and looking forward to the next part. I thought the dream sequences were just fine. The first one was initially confusing but I think that was the intent.
Gnarl
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Tailsko
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
A great work! Beautifully done. The only things I'd mention is to give it another run through an editor, a few spelling and grammar errors here and there, nothing huge, and perhaps something else to make it a bit more evident when the character is dreaming. I can see how it might be missed by a few which part are her wet dreams and which parts are real.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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