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The Overflowing Bra

Bree's ID Curse: Part 2
Bree's ID Card continues to change her as her life--and body--quickly spiral out of her control. Contains part 1.
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Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Would absolutely love more, I liked the pink hair and blue lips and the method of transformation is great. Again would love more and possible with more fun bizarre transformation. 
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I really enjoyed both parts and I would absolutely love to see more stories like this.
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Not as good as part one but a good story on its own.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Good second part, though imo it would be better to save both chapers in separate files to get straight to the start. Also I'm wondering:

Why doesnt she write a description of her ideal id-self down and get her roommate to read it out for her ?

Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

You describe Carly as having a "short 5’4” stature" - 5'4" is the AVERAGE height for women in the USA!!

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