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The Overflowing Bra

Shamus Baran
Ten Persons, Ten Doors -- Part One
A story inspired by the game Seven Persons Seven Doors /Zero's Last Escape.   

No growth (yet!)  just setting the stage for a twisted game that puts it's captives through all sorts of torment.

This is effectively a teaser chapter before the fun begins.

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Miss Lany
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

I can't imagine why you split up this story when the first two chapters put together are already shorter than most stories on here. This part has no BE and doesn't even finish setting up the plot and characters, so I don't even feel like I'm rating the first chapter of a story, but so far the writing is well done and the characters are showing potential at least.

Overall= 4, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Keep it coming!

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