It's been a long time coming, but this is the Prologue (edited and posted here again) and Chapter I (new material) of my new story. Set in the same universe as Amanda and Andy, this story revolves around Natalie, a "reformed" succubus, and Matt, a guy who works in her office and the trials and tribulations of there lives.
This has taken 3 years to write, edit, write some more, and edit some more. The good news is it's all done, the bad news is it's 200+ pages, so I am putting it up in little chunks.
Constructive comments are welcome! Thanks for reading.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.22
- BE: 3.83
- Characters: 4.06
- Technical: 4.22
Bb47
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
kain123
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I find it impressive the ammount of negative ratings. And they don't even bother writing why they down voted it. I guess it is just not the kind of story they were looking for for.
blick
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
vile.... you should leave earth.
it's me
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
The only reason I gave you 1's is because there is no way to give zero or negative numbers.....like negative infinity squared.
maDmanDy
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Erotic Literature Enthusiast
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Superb work. Keep posting.
...And maybe post this book as epub?
draconispax
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Amazing, just amazing. Honestly one of the best stories of any variety i've read in quite some time.
Beachball boobs
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Wow, this story has to be in the top ten, hell top 5 on BE! More, please, more!
Draco963
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Excellently written. Made me go through your posting history, I can't believe I somehow missed Anne and Andy 3, 3.1, and 4 being uploaded... As before, great characters and good descriptions. Your prose flows easily, and is enjoyable to read. Caught a few small grammatical mistakes (of after off, a couple other tiny things), but otherwise an excellent read.
deus
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Great stuff! I'm really looking forward to the next chapters! Thanks for sharing!
Dperks
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Awesome! Can't wait for more. Very readable and entertaining.
Zoll2008
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
This is very entertaining even though the character descriptions are a little vague. Looking forward to seeing the rest of this story.
Kronk12144
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Though still early this is very well written engaging and interesting.
Definitely recommended.
But why make us wait if you have the full story post it or at least link to it.
WritingBitch
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I loved this story. Though, that being said the BE was fairly lacking in that we never really saw any of it "on-screen". Still, the story was absolutely wonderful and I enjoyed every minute spent reading it.
Others have said that there isn't major depth to the characters and in some aspects I agree, except I am completely in love with Natalie as a character. She IS likeable, though I suppose I've always been a fan of the "scarlet woman". Something about the dangerous woman always excites me, probably why I liked Natasha from A&A (well, a reason other than arousal).
Technical quality is fantastic as the rest of your stories. All in all, I enjoyed the story thoroughly and I eagerly await the next part!
Kanodin
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
The characters don't have a whole lot of depth (they seem kind of cardboard/stupid, even if they can type ridiculously fast), but you definitely push all my horny buttons. Would it be too much trouble to just release the omnibus now?! :-)
Muad
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Keep them coming!!!
Awesome work!
Shouousan
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I remembering reading the A and A stories when I first found the site. I'm glad to see you have grown back into it. ;)
CW
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
loved it, can't wait for more
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