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The Overflowing Bra

As Much as She Can Take, Part III
Her breasts already dangerously overinflated, Colette wakes up to find them straining to hold much more, and is desperate to find a way to stop her expansion before it's too late.
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Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I agree with Xodin, some more discription would be grate, wouldn't be against her getting absolutely massive and transparant but please don't pop her, also find a way for her to get smaller and then blow her up all over again.

Also like Xodin said, what's happening inside her, is everything expanding? is her womand hood growing, how does it look. is her womandhood getting tigher, is there a sort of cavern inside her (like unbirth) where he can go in her, did her womandhood grow bigger or stretched out since you mentioned that.

Also again where's her juices going? is she swollen so tightly that it is collecting inside her and blowing her up too? you could also make her release air when she becomes transparant from her womand hood, nipples, etc that be fun :P

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Really good story. I wish the descriptions of the growth and size observations had been a bit more detailed. The story regularly indicates that she's constantly near some potential bursting point, but that concern stays mostly static throughout the story, save for the one moment near the end where she looks truly panicked, but even that is very brief. It might have helped if a series of descriptions that progressively describe her body losing elasticity, or showing additional but different signs of approaching bursting were provided to give a sense of rising tension and approaching potential doom. Something that lets the reader realize that she's passing different milestones on the way to bursting, and constantly wondering if there are any more milestones left for her to pass, or if she's really about to blow right then and there. Just something that constant ups the tension rather than keeping it at relatively the same level throughout.

Additionally, the size of Colette's body according to the measurements given made it real difficult to imagine how she could have squeezed through the house and doorways, as well as how she was oriented in her posture throughout the story. Some description about how the shape of her body had to change in order to accommodate a girl who was effectively twice as wide as most of the passages and entryways that she passed through would have helped to make it more believable.

I was also hoping there might be more detailed descriptions of how her womanhood had changed due to the inflation. There were some, but that's a huge area ripe for story detail that you could explore in the future. How big was her clit? Were her labia looking as if they'd burst too? Were vaginal juices pouring out of her everytime her sensitive skin got roughly touched? Was the air pressure making her inner vaginal passage shallower by pushing her cervix closer to her entrance, thus making her boyfriend feel even bigger inside of her when he entered her? Lots of opportunity here to deepen the description.

The dialogue was excellent. It really gave good insight in to Colette's personality, and her addiction. Would probably be good if the boyfriend had gone in to further detail about the struggle of temptation he faced whenever he looked at her.

I'm sure folks definitely want to see her bigger. I don't want to see her pop, but if you can find a way to describe her right on the verge of it, and losing her mind to pleasure as she becomes a fucktoy because of it, that would be awesome for a part IV. I don't need to see her outgrow the room per se, but definitely if she grows big enough to the point where her skin is stretched so thin that she starts becoming a bit transparent, or stretchmarks appears, or some sort of description that shows that having sex is seriously a dangerous thing for her that still happens despite the risk to her life, that would be fun.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Hello Kodos, I don't know why no one has commented on your story yet. I read it a few days ago and I personally liked it. I like the suspense of how big Colette is getting and if she will pop or not (I'm hoping she won't), and I like the introduction of the skeptical roommate who is now showing interest in what the pump can do. I hope that you feel inspired enough to continue the story and perhaps integrate the roommate into all the fun!

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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