Paul's life at his new university takes an unexpected turn when girls start throwing themselves at him and transforming. Then throwing themselves at each other. What is the cause of this strange behavior? Can the girls cope with their new feeling for Paul and each other? How exactly is this situation a 'problem'?
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.64
- BE: 3.71
- Characters: 4.43
- Technical: 4.43
Eddie
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
A great welldone story. The BE and PE ran up against my need for specifics, but just a bit.
Madmacs2010
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
I loved this story, just the right balance of sexy, erotic, and plot to keep it going and keep me reading. The negatives are mostly for spelling errors and wrong word mistakes, nothing a good proofread couldn't fix, so they're irksome rather than spoiling it, like a bum note in a piano concerto. Personally it would have been a bit nicer to have a little more in the BE scenes, some more on the sensation and process,but with so many characters in one story I can understand rushing through them later on, hence the 4 on that score but overall, a potential classic in this genre. Thank you
I Think
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Well, guess leaving text is obligatory -- see my comment on part 4!
flies
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
wonderfully written, with good characterization and lively humor. technical quality was A+, my only suggestion would be to make sure your descriptions of physical action are clear as sometimes I had trouble figuring out exactly who was where.
Great idea, great execution. keep it up!!
Lucent
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
The story is really interesting so far and I am very eager to read more!
Vahktang
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Quite enjoyed your story.
Liked the characters, the action, the plot, the dialogue.
Looking forward to a centaur, with a vagina between each set of legs.
Crash
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
While some of the more complex scenes (be, sex) could use more description for clarity, I can't exactly say how. I really like the concept!
scotesr
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
For some reason i can not access the HTML page to read, can this be loaded like in word or pdf format?
TheFwank
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Not bad at all. Definitely hoping to see a part 2, with more and different characters. :)
Roid Abuser
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Great, great story. I really appreciate the muscle growth in the guy. I echo the earlier comments made below: (1) bit more exposition about the changes. They were almost off screen and (2) less explanation about why the changes were happening. Perhaps a hint in the professor's class --- change the class subject and have her give the exposition, but be a witch who was trying to keep a lid on the magical creatures and it backfired because there was accidentally 12 of the magical creatures (one from each species) and it backfired. Then have her want to steal the male protagonists' power from him. Etc. (Just ideas to play with)
rydz
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
The other reviews are right, in that the transformations themselves could do to be a bit longer. Also, just handing out the entire exposition of why it was all happening felt premature. That being said I'm completely in love with the female characters and their somewhat detached attitude towards the male lead. Choosing to sleep with him because it's fun, rather than falling on him because they can't help it? That sense of agency is hard to come by in this genre.
ichabod cream
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
this is a great story.
good work.
Gorp Thorp
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I'll agree with the first review. I liked the story, it was well-written and easy to follow. I'd just like more in the BE department, maybe a little slower, more description. Maybe one of the women he meets won't be as accepting of the transformation and try to resist? I'm definitely interested in reading more- great work.
daichi azure
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Overall story was interesting, but the description of their breasts enlarging could of been explained and drawn out a bit more.
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