Maya and her friend, Kimmi, get invited to a party when they are approached by a local resident while moving into their new house on fraternity row. Maya isn't so keen on going, feeling her multi-breasted friend will outclass her when it comes to snaring a guy. But there seems to be a young man at the party who can help her with that, if she'll only ask. And what's this he's saying about this day having already happened before, but turning out different? Something about people having changed...
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 4.50
- Characters: 5.00
- Technical: 4.00
Browser
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
So fun and hot. I love the parallels to the first chapter you've created here; the updated reality is convincing and attractive.
I really dislike the multiple breasts thing and this is still probably the hottest thing I've ever read. I'd personally have liked to see more fleshed out descriptions of the changes and the breast sizes, as well as some insight into the continually updated reality Maya was experiencing (thinking back to a newly-busty high school memory, for instance). Thats just me speaking to my personal tastes, however.
Really good, enjoyable stuff.
Catfish
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Another batch of great reality-altering transformations here, plus a twist ending! Could have at least used a pass through the spell check, though. (Don't worry, I'm emailing Zymurgy right now to offer my proofreading services.)
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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