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With sleep comes a slow transformation for both John & Mindy. John can barely control himself but realizes that he needs to keep calm in order keep Mindy from withdrawing even more. Comments are welcome!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.63
- BE: 3.13
- Characters: 4.50
- Technical: 4.88
Double
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I echo the sentiments of others, and am patiently waiting for the next part. Plot development is extraordinary.
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envy
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great development, a bit long--but I have no patience. There is a lot of potential once the introductions are completed. It appears to be a longer story--no O'Henry story here. Good writing, grammar and plot development. I find this to be missing in too many stories. I like the current path of development and look forward to more.
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Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
To quote Cheeb, "Dude. Continue the transformations in the direction you're having them. This story is a godsend." -- exactly my thoughts. Can't wait for the next part and for them to get bigger and sexier.
duffdog
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
How far will the aliens push things to keep getting their commodity? Sounds interesting so far
FugitiveSquirrel
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Loving the story so far. I can't wait until we get to some more pronounced expansion.
Cheeb
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Dude.
Continue the transformations in the direction you're having them.
This story is a godsend.
Roid Abuser
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I like this story, especially the tension of the woman not particularly liking the changes to her body, but also being overpowered by them. Introduce another, previously unknown, female who isn't so reluctant and get her jealous, watching "her" man and the new female, but stopped from joining due to a force field! Perhaps also go back in the narrative and have the first female explain her feeling and emotions as her body becomes so sexual.
Bahamad
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I'm torn. The story is shaping up to be a fun tale, the characters actually have some personality and don't collapse immediately under the BE elements...but this chapter's actual BE seemed minimal. I think it's well worth the wait and ties in with the previous chapter, just not much actual BE in this one.
Eagerly waiting for the next chapter and any further developments in character or form.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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