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The Earth is gone. Intergalactic pleasure miners have gathered their small, sample group of humans to test and have destroyed the planet as they departed, per standard operating procedures.
John and Mindy find themselves isolated in an incubation room without any answers and only each other to interact with.
Unfortunately, they don't get along so well.. at least, at first.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.20
- BE: 3.40
- Characters: 4.40
- Technical: 4.80
duffdog
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Good start, this has so much potential. Can't wait to see where it goes.
Smart Guy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Typically, I'd say absolute shit.
But here, I have absolute expectation. I hope you don't disapoint.
Catfish
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
As a human resident of Earth, I find the setup off-putting -- seems like what the aliens have done is the equivalent of an alcoholic shoplifting a mini-bottle of booze, and then burning down the entire city block on which the liquor store is located.
But I'm intrigued enough by the scenario involving the two main characters that I'm willing to keep reading, at least through the next chapter.
scotesr
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Can't wait for the next chapter, don't wait too long for the next chapter.
You are doing a very good job. It keeps the reader on the edge of their seat.
GiantAmongMidgets
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great setup, but we need more BE!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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