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The Overflowing Bra

The Anomaly pt.2
Kim wakes up with a ripping hangover, unsure of what happened the night before. 
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The Light Fantastic
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Absolutely fantastic! I'm glad to see the tables turn a little, too. Eager for more!

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I've got to say, this is turning into a high point for recent memory of submissions. The grammar is good, the internal justification helps to show the counter-arguments were thought about, and the escalating changes and descriptions are exciting as all heck.

A sexually excited young woman with a reality-bending array of dials and virtual power? I can only picture her starting to work it like a turntable! I'm eager to see this continue as far as inspiration carries it, and hope it does so for a while.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Wow, another great installment. I thought the "split personality" aspect was especially well done. Now can't wait for the next chapter to see what kind of trouble a horny nine-breasted woman can get into with a transformation device, assuming she can find a charger.

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