Kim and her friend Maya go to a party, where people start changing. But only Kim seems to see. Is she different?
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 3.67
- Characters: 4.17
- Technical: 3.83
TheEarl
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Very good quality story and I liked the main character a lot. Definitely going to read through the rest.
Mark T
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
One of my favorite type of story: seemingly magical BE with some transformees oblivious while others (in this case, our protagonist) are at least partially aware and puzzling it out. Can't wait for later parts! Nicely done, very atmospheric!
Mr Gorpthorp
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
This story has great potential. Would like to see a slower expansion and more description, but overall I like it. Always enjoy the idea of fighting the transformation but always slowly losing ground
The Guy
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
cant read, can you put it in a more generally available format?
Catfish
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
A couple of excellent transformations here. Definitely looking forward to more!
Bahamad
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great first part, eager to see what part 2 brings (exploits during the evening, a morning after/"Hangover" scenario, or something else), and whether a part 3/series will be coming along afterwards (does Kim get control of the device and make her own changes, are the changes still in effect). The story felt like a Limerick/Pratt piece in its tone/pacing and left me wanting more, which I'd say is a good thing.
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