The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

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This is the 3rd and final installment of "The Puzzle Box Curse."  Violet and her allies take on the wicked demon Hamamelis and try to save the world from sexual enslavement.  Can they stop her?  What are the costs?  Find out in the exciting conclusion herein.

Note: This series is intended to set off a new setting that I will try to get around writing about.

Average Scores:

Overall: 4.00
BE: 3.67
Characters: 4.00
Technical: 5.00

2Dex

Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 5

First off, I really liked the first two parts, but this one just didn't have the same feel. No BE at all, and just very little description of what's going on in general. Some of the weird and erotic changes that do happen are simply glossed over, like they were added as an afterthought. A bulk of the action and actual prose are devoted to the sex scene, and even then, while reading, I didn't find it at all stimulating.

Honestly, this third part is too short, with not enough of what made the first two fun, nuanced, and interesting. Either this was written by someone else entirely, or the author quickly threw it together to end the story so he could focus on his extended universe.

Lily Bunny

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I will give all fives to not disturb your score, but I would like to know if its possable to get a .txt or rtf or even .doc version of this file? I am legally blind and the software I use to read these wonderful stories doesn't work too well with pdf files.

Thanks.

Catfish

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Ratings are for the whole 3-part story, which is excellent overall. I think this part in particular suffers from being a little short -- for example, I would have liked to have seen more description of various changes in the park -- but I like the setup, so I'm looking forward to more adventures in this altered world.

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.

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