Ashley is an adventurer and treasure hunter. She finds a lead on a mysterious technology she has been trying to find for years, and goes to investigate. The technology she finds does things that even she couldn't predict...
Short 7 page story in .txt, .html and .odt format.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 4.00
- Characters: 3.50
- Technical: 4.50
Someone
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Enjoyed the story, although it felt like you were just checking fetishes off a list for some of it. Lactation: check! Lighter-than-air inflation (which I would have loved to see more of): check!
I like how you have her forced to submit to expansion she didn't really choose. That's a sexy fantasy.
TheBandColdplay
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Story was an enjoyable read, you said in the description that it was a short one so I can't ding you for how quickly the BE all went down. Personally, I'm a big fan of ass expansion and it disappointed me a little that you went to the trouble of describing the size of hers, but never having it expand. Oh well, thanks for writing!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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