A young girl meets another older girl online and they become friends. The older tells the younger of a certain miracle drink...but does it really do what she leads on? Or does it do something much, much more? Another short story written in about an hour. No real plot, just some good old fashioned BE. In .html, .txt and .odt format.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.80
- BE: 3.60
- Characters: 3.80
- Technical: 3.80
YoungFan
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
It's not pedo unless there's sexual stuff going on. For me, being a fan of Axolotl and Some Sort of Dog's work, I really miss the stories with much younger protagonists struggling with early onset breast growth, and the stories that form around that.
This story was great! Although the BE felt a little rushed.
MysteryGuy9215
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Just so we're clear here: no growth of minors or Age Progression occurs within this story. The character does start out as 13, but no expansion occurs until she is 20, and that is explicitly stated within the story. Her age is as such because of plot reasons, that is all
jsands
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Protagonist being 13 struck a Pedo chord, No thanks!
Xero
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Thanks for the enjoyable short romp! As always, great little piece of writing.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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