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Brandi is baking pancakes today and Alyssa is invited. But, how did Brandi get so crazily curvaceous? Hope you guys enjoy! As always, feedback and constructive criticism are appreciated.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.86
- BE: 4.71
- Characters: 4.29
- Technical: 4.86
Tieryn
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
This is one of my favorite stories on here. I really enjoy your writing style; one sentence in particular I loved towards the end: "Brandi had transformed me into a walking, jiggling caricature of the prototypical female form." That, to me, is a great sentence for a BE story.
C.
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Pretty good. Not one for over the top descriptions.
What I found lacking: not much background, a bit more would be fine.
Too over-the-top growth.
Anyway - good effort!
lexi
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
does not fail to please ^_^ i always love a good ass expansion story, and they are hard to come by.
Recluse
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
An excellent story to add to the other top stories on this site. The growth was described very well. She got a bit too big for my tastes, but oh BOY was it fun watching her get there.
Epic
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
CuddlebeamAA
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Mattio
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Dang this was hot. I'd love to read a sequel. You've got some good talent.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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