In a slightly more conventional, traditional expansion story, Sam has always hated everything about her physical self. From her hair to her height to, of course, her breasts, there isn't one thing that she likes. When she finds out that she has the ability to make changes to herself, the cautious Sam sets about to do so in a careful, thoughtful manner. Things change, however, when she unexpectedly finds the limit to her abilities, and all of her small changes start to spiral out of control.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.42
- BE: 4.42
- Characters: 4.50
- Technical: 4.75
ABG
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Wherever you are, I hope you're doing well. This is one of my favorite stories of all time. Your handling of narration and description is masterful. I hope you are proud of this piece because it is the type of smut I aspire to create.
Mouse
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Fantastic. Very well done.
CleavageCuddler
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Wonderful story. The story progressed smoothly and kept me entertained and guessing what would happen next the whole time. A trait I can admire in any writing.
js
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Goes downhill in a hurry from the sex scene. No fun for the characters = no fun for me.
xandercroft
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I alyways enjoy a mitch story. Always of quality. Just knocks it outta the park. Also its one of the few places I can go for weight gain stories. Awsome mich!
Leviathan
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
One of the better BE stories I've read in ages. I usually don't mind stories going "off the rails", but for some reason I was really wanting a different sort of ending than what happened. I loved the idea that once she ran out of "wishes", the changes became amplified, but I think it would have been more interesting if there was a stopping point somewhere around normalcy or at least mobility. I was hoping that the roomate's wish was actually that she wanted to be like the main character, so that the story could have had some kind of deeper meaning and/or moral at the end. Lol, I guess what I'm saying is it felt like the story was going to have a deeper plot, then it just kind of went full on loopy instead. But please don't get me wrong, the story is great no matter what happens. Great work.
Vez'Roth
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
The writing was fantastic but the ending portion of the story got a bit over-done for my flavors. I've got odd desires when it comes to the world of BE because my desires and enjoyment end in the realm of G cup and anything larger gets squicky. The characters seemed to be well planned, well written and over-all well done.
I'd give it 2 1/2 to 3 stars just because of the writing and the characters. I'm always impressed to see writers on here that can actually write well.
Catfish
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Descriptions of the transformations were very nicely detailed. You may not have hit as many fetishes as you did with your previous stories, but you certainly did hit some of mine with this one.
FunkForTheFunky
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Excellent pacing, depth, and the twists sneak up on you in the best ways. I loved how you worked in the numbers like that - I didn't notice what you were doing until just before the character pointed it out.
The introduction is exactly the right length - too long and I lose interest and skim through important parts, too short and I feel confused. It creates a sense of anxiousness and makes the changes that much hotter - the reader really feels like the main character has a real laundry list of changes they want to make.
There are a few typos here and there but it's nothing terrible. Technically I'd say this is 4.5 stars. Everything else is a solid 5.
For any further works I would definitely say use the same writing ideas you had here - twists by way of repetition of "something in the background" (ergo, the numbers). A word of caution is that while jealousy is fun for a story or two it makes for predictable progressions. Nonetheless, it was handled well here.
Thanks for a fun read and I'm looking forward to more.
ac
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Quite good. My only quibble would be that the changes didn't have any sort of internal logic -- there was no rhyme or reason to their continuation, which with a lesser writer can come off as carelessness.
MoonSugar
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Just absolutely fantastic. I wish I could write half as good as that! My only dislike was that she kept shrinking (I love a tall gal) but other than that it was all perfect! Maybe the description of sizes could be more clear but then I suppose you might as well just leave that to the reader's imagination.
Overall though it was brilliant and if I could forget the last half an hour to read it fresh I totally would.
anonA
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
great story, likeable characters, the twist with the limited wishes and the nonconsensual transformations added greatly to my enjoyment.
I do missed some of the fetishes from your other stories, but please keep on writing, your stories are of the rare breed where te plot is more interesting than the porn.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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