The recently-single Morris is almost relieved that he can get back to what he does best: browsing and cataloging pornography from the enormous range of things he finds sexually fascinating. When every single erotic thing he has ever fantasized about starts to come true, and every woman in his life starts to fill a niche in his library of turn-ons, he finds that sometimes what you want can be a little creepier than you had imagined it would be. Only time will tell if he'll find the cause and stop it, or if he'll give in to the horde of women desperately trying to get into his increasingly full pants, losing himself to a world of pleasure.
Absolutely legendary. I couldn't bring myself to actually do what I intended to do when opening this story, as I was too enraptured by the onlyabitmorelighthearted fantastic Wyrd Tales homage that was unfolding before me. I want you to know just how big a feat that is This story had almost every single fetish I've ever gone rabid and easily lost myself to, and I didn't indulge myself to a single one of them the whole time, because I was just so damn interested in the actual story itself. This story was pure magical alchemy. 1010.
Legendary story, if there was a hall of fame on this site, this story would be in it
Massive transformations. Mega build up
At first, I thought that reading this story was a bit daunting, but I found myself thoroughly entertained. Morris is a better man than I am to have resisted temptation as long as he did.
Fantastic writing!
It's eerie how similar one's tastes can be to another random person on the internet. This story struck nearly every cord of mine, with the added bonus of being a really interesting story in it's own right.
This needs to be made into a comic.
Longtime reader, first-time commenter, because you really went above and beyond on this one, Mich. I've been following your work since "Unexplained Additions," and it's great to see how far you've come and how great your stories are becoming.
very creative! seriously, the ideas here are fucking awesome. Hat off to you.
Usually, my taste in erotic fiction demands more sex, but here, there's an actual story. This is, hands down, some of the best writing I've ever seen on this website. Great work. (Consider writing some saleable short stories or something. srsly.)
Beautiful erotica, but with a touch of melancholy. I love the way the author fused the Lovecraftian with various fantasy archetypes. Kudos!
Loved it. Read it all in one sitting. Bravo, dude.
Another awesome story Mich!
As a Portlander who currently lives with two women (a flatchested intellectual and a fat, big titted Southern girl) this story hit close to home! It would be worth watching them transform in god knows what ways, even if it meant they were doomed to wander off and try to fuck the protagonist of this story in the end. :)
I also enjoyed the global nature of the transformation epidemic, making it so that no adult woman went unscathed, and I loved the focus on character and plot rather than this being pure jerkoff fuel. I would love to read a sequel!
Fun story, and you always come up with innovative ways to write this weird stuff, and it almost starts to veer off into a bizarre Charlie Kaufman/Adaptation territory, but never quite.
One issue though is there's a lot of unnecessary setup in the beginning (in true Lovecraft style. Maybe you did it as a wink to the elder gods. Feels a little "Case of Charles Dexter Ward"?). It feels unnatural and slow, way too wordy and meandering, especially because once you get into the guts of the story you jet off at an airy clip that flows with the kind of technical know how so that you can't see the writing gears cranking away behind the page.
This was a pretty great read overall. As others have noted, the plot and characters were well thought out.
My only complaints would be that BE wasn't described very much (curse you Offstage tag!) and that the transformations seemed to peak too early in the story, with the news updates becoming less "strange transformations to women" and more "same transformations, just more of them now."
Without a doubt the greatest smut story I've ever read, and I've been reading them for a long time.
THANK YOU
Simply legendary. One of the best of all time on the site.
Make no mistake - this is a story first, porn second. You build up to him fucking someone, and there's a lot to go through. Fantastic once you understand the terms.
Excellent storytelling ability here. The cast of secondary characters was amazing, yet I found the primary character completely unrelatable and very frustrating. I didn't find it realistic that he refused to have sex with all of those girls that whole time. It also made it so that I had to read about a guy jacking off instead of having sex with increasingly beautiful women.
Excellently written and an interesting story. I felt it fell flat as erotica though. Morris spent almost the entire story jerking off, and we had more scenes of him sucking his own dick than fucking any of the other girls. The physical descriptions also tapered off toward the middle.
I'm certain that this story had nothing to do with the death of Harold Ramis, just an amazing tribute.
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I don't have anything to add that hasn't already been said. I would like to say that I would LOVE to see side stories from this universe, elaborating on some of the changes, and maybe featuring a bit more actual sex. (I'm particularly intrigued by the mechanics of how massive penetration works in this setting--either Sarah or a new character could show that off in more detail.)
Absolutely amazing accomplishment. You managed to bring forth an array of characters and scenarios that surprised me in their sexiness, weave in a genuinely emotional love story.
My biggest nitpick is that the piece felt too much like one long session of foreplay with a way-too-fast ending. Your main character denies and denies and denies the actual copulation that your audience is craving so badly, and can actually lead to some skipping through of the story when a less patient reader just wants to get to 'the good stuff'
A nice way to avoid this would have maybe been to place vignettes or cutaways to the office staff while they grow and their minds change. How the growth affects their interpersonal relationships, their urges, their sex lives. This prevents a 'one-and-done' story and turns the piece into a sexual odyssey that survives multiple reads.
I say all of this out of love, I still absolutely loved your story and applaud you for a great piece of work. Please keep writing!
As others have said, overall this is really dynamite.
Simply lovely.
So this is what would happen if Haruhi Suzumiya were born male, had sexual fantasies and no oversight.
I like it!
An ardent fan of your stories, hope they keep rolling out. Love the plots and characters you write, they add so much to the feel.
An A for this one, a tiny step down from the last two which were A+s in my book, but I suspect that's just from personal fetish opinion.
All in all, amazing job and hope you never stop writing!
Mich, you are one of my favorite fetish writers. I love how you incorporate multiple forms of expansion into your stories; Growth Fantastic in particular just blew me away.
This story... I like the set-up, I like the effects being global, and I can appreciate you expanding your range to include blueberry girls and catgirls and everything, but it just didn't work for me overall. Part of it is that I wish you'd paid attention to just the weight gain, ass growth and pregnancy bits that I love, whereas muscle growth doesn't do anything for me and shemales leave me cold. The variety here didn't match up to my own tastes entirely, so this story just wasn't for me.
I did like the descriptions of Scarlett's(?) blueberry transformation. That's never been a fetish that works for me, but the way you paced it out and drew attention to the intermediate stages grabbed me. Especially the scene where she's like halfway changed and she meets him at the mall.
And I have to say... maybe too much plot? Maybe if you had shortened the time from the earthquake to the elder god's apparent return. Instead of eight months just five or even four. It got kind of repetitive to have Morris and the other woman spending weeks and then months looking for answers without any leads. That's just padding, really.
Still, I'm looking forward to whatever you come up with next.
It has already been said. There were a few grammatical errors here and there, but not enough to degrade the story.
That being said, this was AWESOME! You definitely need to write more. I normally come to this site just to find smut, which is pretty easy to find. This story was something else entirely. It achieved my goal pretty easily, but I found myself glued to it even afterward. I didn't move from my seat until I had finished the entire length of it. I genuinely felt like I was in Morris's position, given that he and I actually sound like the same exact person. I'm glad he didn't simply give in even though he really wanted to.
I loved the descriptions of the various types of expansion and transformations. Like The Light Fantastic said, you had a few in there that don't exactly strike my fancy, but it doesn't take away from the rest of the story. Very awesome job, my man. I look forward to seeing more of your work.
This is probably the only story on this site in which I have stopped caring about the fap material to focus on the actual story. The transformations and such were kind of bland in general--too much and not enough focus on any one--but the Ghostbusters thing near the end was kind of hilarious. It became a bizarre reversal of a normal BE fic, which was pretty fun.
Bravo, Mich. You're a man after my own heart. My perverted, depraved, very Morris-like heart. (His porn folder sounds much like my own carefully-organized archive of stories, right down to the contents.) I can echo The Light Fantastic in commending your characterization, especially your deployment of exposition. It never felt forced, and Morris' motivations were always clear. (In a genre where having your main character suddenly go all clod-like when the plot requires him to, yours stayed properly coherent [if lust-addled] throughout.)
A few nit-picks for grammatical errors -- an overzealous autocorrect, perhaps? And Morris' own transformation felt a little vague at times. But these quibbles in no way distract from the quality of the work as a whole. Well done.
Wow, dude. Absolutely amazing.
Tight, well-written, fantastic descriptions of what was going on and a good balance between plot and smut. Literally one of the best stories I've read on this site in ages. Doesn't hit all my kinks (fat growth especially is ugh) but the rest was so well done and honestly it's not fair to rate based on my kink preferences.
The characters were believable and consistent. Normally less competent writers let their characters basically blend into one another, and if I don't focus while reading (and let's be honest, you shouldn't have to focus while reading porn) the names just sort of wash over me in a vaguely female haze. Your story, on the other hand, I never had to guess which of your characters was which or go back and try and catch up. They were fairly simple broad-brush characters but there's nothing wrong with that.
The critiques I'm going to give are, let's say on a higher level; I'm going to nitpick but know that I'm doing it already blown away by the quality.
You could have done with a pass by a proofreader, or your own proofing pass. I'm guilty of the same thing, but there were a few typos, missing words, that sort of thing. Some of the phrases earlier on were also kind of clunky and maybe a little elaborate for what you were going for. You probably didn't need to make a big deal about Portland, either, given that it wasn't really germane to the plot.
I also felt the ending could have been telegraphed/alluded to a little more. Obviously supernatural things were happening, but the origin of them, the tone of why it was happening, was a little muddled right up until the end. Maybe during some of Morris's dreams he could have been having visions, or hearing whispers while he was alone in the apartment?
All in all a fantastic effort. Keep writing!