The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Malon's Milk
(File is in txt format. Please alert me if there are any errors with the file and I will re-upload in a different format.)

Average Scores:

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

This was a good short story. Loved the Legend of Zelda references, but the BE and characters could have used a bit of fleshing out, no pun intended.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

I thought this was a great story. Lactation isn't quite my thing, but this was a very easy and enjoyable read.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Great story, with a happy ending. Very entertaining. Leaves a lot of room for additional stories. The tribe of Serena, the mother of Malon. Well written too. I only saw 1 typo. Uneasonably, I think. One tiny criticism that I'm sure you've heard before, loose the text file. Then old geezers like me can increase the font size!

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

I've seen comics about this situation. Not per say, but as a fan of the series, you have my approval.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Shame it was so short.

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