Angela becomes displeased with her figure, and finds supplements that may shape her to her desires. Invloves weight loss and breast expansion.
And if I may say something real quick: I don't mind any criticism. Not in the least. And I suppose I should have said this in prior story uploads, but I neglected to, so I'm saying it now: Many of the stories I am uploading were written YEARS ago, before I had any sort of reference to BE writing. All I had were vague ideas in my head to lead me.
Is it an excuse for poor quality? Certainly not. I could always go back and re-edit some of them (and for most of them, I do before I upload, but not to a high degree). But I just wanted to say that. Again, this should not deter anyone from giving criticism or feedback, I just wanted to clarify and give some perspective is all. I appreciate any words or ratings of any kind, as long as they are constructive. Know that I am always working to improve my writings. Thank you.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.75
- BE: 4.25
- Characters: 4.50
- Technical: 4.25
swell guy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great story with even more potential. You're writing is awesome. Just keep refining it like a sharp blade. You rock.
ToBEQueen
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Another good one, but yeah, more detail, longer stuff. Enjoyed it!
Lunar
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I rarely comment, but I think this story needs a lot of detail improvements as well as continuation. I'd much rather know how it's growing as well. It seems to degrade as it goes down the way. A nice story though with some potential.
blerg
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
i rather see your sories in just txt format
otherwise great storie
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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