I've browsed this archive before, but haven't ever found something truly tailored to my tastes, so I decided to write my own. The setting of this story is an alternate history where the Central Powers win World War 1. It's very plot heavy and the expansion is very subtle, being implied by description and reaction (which I like). My first story, so please don't throw me to the wolves, at least not yet. Critique is very welcome.
Rest assured that once the second part comes out, the expansions will be a little more blatant.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.50
- BE: 3.50
- Characters: 5.00
- Technical: 5.00
deux_anges
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Good prologue. The background information is well written and thought out. Would have got full marks if there were more descriptions of big boobies. :) Looking forward to the next part.
Geoffk
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Parallel universe stories aren't easy to write, but this one is interesting and believale. The BE mechanism is hot and also plausible. Although the increase here was a bit subtle, it was very well-written and nice. Overall, this is an excellent job.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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