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In the second chapter of the long-delayed story The Puzzle Box Curse, our heroine Violet and her friends nearly resign themselves to defeat, but a new hope arises. That hope comes with forbidding troubles for the world, but weird transformations, breast fixation, and passionate sex await in their next stage of the adventure!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.86
- BE: 4.86
- Characters: 4.86
- Technical: 4.29
M
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Great! Can't wait for the next one.
Delta
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Great, the original was one of my favorites and I'm glad to see you're continuing it. Can't wait to read more.
TFHound
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 2
Ok, I am a bit torn here. It is a very good story line. You obviously have aptitude in the use of grammar. Your descriptions are "exciting". But....
Your editing needs a lot of work. I only say this because it seemed to fail at the most exciting times. Everything collapsed (edit wise) just as the best part was happening. Very bad timing.
That said, it didn't ruin the over all likeability of the story. I did give you a technical of 2 even though there were only a few areas where it was a .5 briefly. The majority of the story it was 4.5. See my comment on timing....
BE I gave you a 4 because you kept them involved. I liked the Violet arousal twist. Not a lot of growth but well played here IMO.
I really liked the story. I hope you continue it. I just think this late addition was rushed...
jrepg
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I really enjoyed this continuation and it reminded me how much I liked the first part. Please continue.
mp
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
sw
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Catfish
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Wow, wow, wow -- that's all I can say. I hope the wait for Part 3 isn't quite so long!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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