TrebleCleffy@gmail.com
Tori, a busty college girl, spends her summer vacation with two friends at Georgia’s family vineyard in California. A Violet Beauregard-type story, but with a pretty strong BE emphasis. My first story posted. Hope people enjoy.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.70
- BE: 4.50
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 4.70
The Preve
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Oompa! Loompa! Very impressive take on Violet Beauregard :)
HRadish
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
RapierStab
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Simply excellent. We need more like this. Personally, I'd love to see some twist where Georgia ends up in on the action, but honestly, I'd be thrilled to see you write just about anything else.
Kodos
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I absolutely loved this story, and blueberry style expansion usually isn't my thing. You did an amazing job though; your descriptions of the greenhouse and everything in the beginning, and then once things really got going the way you described Tori's expansion was, if you'll pardon the pun, exceptionally juicy. Anyways, congratulations, you have written a truly awesome story here, and I earnestly hope that there will be more to follow, either dealing with Tori and her friends (just how big will they be by the end of the summer?) or off in whatever new directions your fancy takes you!
cman
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Terrifically sexy. As always, could have been longer---seems to stop just when it was getting good :)
g-man001
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
A lot of fun! Keep writing. You did a great job with the main character in the sun room with the hose. Could read more in this world or something like it.
Annonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
xtra123
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Fantastic story! Great style. Anxious for your next one.
Iam Decoy
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Great first story and hope to see more in the future!
Halt04
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Phenomenal! Best story I've seen on here in years! PLEASE write more! Much more more!
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