ghost_of_christmas@yahoo.com
[BE] | LESBIANS | 15 Page story | -VERY STORY DRIVEN- | The story of a girl fighting against her unjustified nickname | NO MALES IN THIS | This was checked by A SWEDE | SWEDEN ON TOP | SMALL BUSTY GIRL AGAIN | | TXT included but not advised ( because bad formatting ) | Find grammar errors and I'll hate you forever ( The swede ) | Merry lesbian day! | Don't make little girls cry. | Realistic size at normal ending, unrealistically huge in epilogue | Please enjoy! |
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 3.50
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 3.00
funfun74
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Characters could use a bit more work but overall I enjoyed the story very much. Thanks for a good Lesbian BE story. There are so few of them around.
I like big ( o )Y( o )
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 2
Hi Ghost,
I enjoyed reading your story "I am not a lolita!" thank you for posting it for us and hope to ready more stories in the future. Don't let haters get under your skin - you write what you enjoy and I promise more people like what you do than the folks who don't. Grammar can be checked a little more and I find it helpful to read out loud listening for hard to read areas. When we write we say in our mind what we want but sometimes that doesn't make it to the screen the same way.
I really loved the potential for the characters! Keep up the work and thank you kindly again!
ktc
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
It's not a 5 based solely on the still poor grammar, but this story is miles ahead of your others in terms of readability and interest. Keep having it proofread, makes it much better.
OAO
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I liked this. Getting someone to proofread definitely improved the quality. There's still some errors, but it's a definite improvement over the other stories.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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