Kelly wants a baby with her husband, Stewart. She and her two housemaids will rise to any heights, swell to any cup-size, and sink Stewart to any depths of lust and hunger to get it. Find out what happens when a magic lotion cross-wires three women's maternal instincts with their sex drives and throws them all into maximum overdrive. How much affection can one man handle before he starts losing his mind, body, and soul? Includes both rtf and pdf formats.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.70
- BE: 3.80
- Characters: 3.50
- Technical: 4.10
flies
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
awesome, awesome, awesome. awesome.
Nobody Important
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Excellent writing, as ever, Oblimo. Not my personal grist, but quality product, nonetheless. The characters were distinct, and the descriptions were evocative.
Well done. Please continue.
moocow
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Great story, right up my alley. Making therapy appointment now.
The only thing I missed was that it was supposed to be a sequel to something else. It would've been nice to have a flashback / recap / link to original story somewhere, to cover the backstory of how Stewy got to be so small.
Jaja
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Not my kinda story but holy crap this was well done! Bravo sir you have a talent!
MRJ
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Welcome back to writing porn for the unwashed (well, partially washed. I for one am well scrubbed) masses. You are a treasure to to all interweb perverts. May your muse tie you up, whip you, and take you to exciting places.
Jobber
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 4
Technically quite good, compared to most of the stuff on this site. But characters were not described or fleshed out, and the plot is poorly explained and barely comprehensible.
Anon
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Oblimo, you glorious bastard. What drug you away from the omni-fetish of shape-shifting goo-girls into this? Well, whatever. I, for one, loved it, and will make an appointment with my therapist about this post-haste.
Gman001
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Interesting. It took a while to follow the whole empty and then fill up thing. Enjoyed the ending with the actual sex and spoiler alert (impregnation) at the end. Keep up the good work and writing in this fetish, you have the knack. Your dialogue was sexy and would do well in just about any story posted to this site.
Oblimo
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
All the writing and scenes are original content. The character names and the story premise, though, were adapted with permission from an earlier story entitled, "Stewart", written by Stewy. It is available on thevalkyrie.com and other locations. Mammilla can be read as a retelling of the same premise or a sequel to the original; I kept the same names for that purpose. (I have to give a rating in order to reply, and I hope no one minds if I give myself a 3.)
1
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Isn't this story someone else's?
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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