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Ok, the last one for a while (unless I get Katya book two taken care of, still have to shoehorn the BE into that one...;)
Tried to pay more attention to typos, and hopefully the punctuation is better this time.
The light-hearted tale of Soviet science, and how they go about BE. Note - some deliberate errors, just to play around with. Some grow, and some are just large to begin with. Have fun...;)
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.89
- BE: 4.00
- Characters: 4.56
- Technical: 4.67
Tityana
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I am about 1 quarter into the story and it is flawless, I love how tatyana makes everyone jealous and notices the huge dick as well.
Megamelonomaniac
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
One if the best new stories to appear here for a while. I particularly liked the tongue-in-cheek writing style that made good fun reading. Thanks!
deux_anges
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great story, enjoyed reading it. The mock Soviet speak was very entertaining. I hope you are going to continue this story with more pregnancy. Maybe add some competition from the political officer's boobs (and even belly!).
Fahzbehn
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I too must add my heartfelt applause to this tale. The simulate Russian speech wasn't bad, didn't take away from it... but I have to agree... I don't know what, outside of his package, that the female lead saw in the male lead.
Gman001
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
like Mary Poppins..practically perfect in every way. Love when you do preg, and this is the best yet! Hear hear!
KW
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Very good, very enjoyable. It's easy to get into Marta's character and stay with her through the course of the story, following her desires. Hugeness is much appreciated. The idea is cute and well handled.
Couple of nitpicks; the references to Americanisms don't really make sense or add anything to the story. The idea of Leon thinking of "American baseball" to stave off climax neither strikes me as funny, nor does it make much sense if you think about it for even a few seconds. In general there are several times when it seems like it would be easy to forget these characters are actually supposed to be Soviet scientists and not your average Americans.
I also feel like Leon needed a little something more to establish why Marta liked him so much. Sure he's handsom and hung but his only notable personality trait at first is his inability to take the hint. After they get together he immediately switches gears into the doting partner, but I still feel he lacks definition beyond that.
Still, it's not supposed to be Shakespeare and the characterization remains ahead of the pack. My complaints are minor quibbles in the face of what is a very good story. My only particular request would have been an X-Months-later followup of what happend to Tatyana (and maybe a second pregnancy for Marta)
pakled
Overall= 4, BE= 1, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
In Soviet Russia...boobs grow you...;)
Thanks, all
Heyo
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I've said it before but it always deserves to be said: Pakled is one of the best.
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Comrade ktc enjoys your stories a bit too much. In Soviet Russia, we grow boobs!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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