belle0887-stx@yahoo.com
So there's currently 4 versions of Part 1, this is the continuation of my version which substitutes Aunt Danielle for his mother. Check out what happens with Timmy and his Aunt decide to Overdose on the pills. And since Sagger won the comment competition from Part 1, I included a big belly for him. Lots of hot expansion, sex, cum, lactation and orgasms.. just how I like it! Let me know what you think!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.00
- BE: 3.55
- Characters: 3.64
- Technical: 3.45
Eddie
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I liked the ending, but wanted more. The scarfing of all the pills was absurd, even for crazy people.
BB47
Overall= 1, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Ok.. I ruined the ending.. but how? Is it because it cuts off? 'Cause I can fix that easily. Or is something else?
Kinda pissed
Overall= 1, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
You total ruined both stores with that bullshit at the end.
f'in fail
Sucker4Boobs
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Great story, but you need to work on your grammar.
BB47
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Sorry roid, I had to cut it off, it was the end of my lunch break (the only time I get to write) ;( Being a geek myself, I struggled with the mass from nowhere issue myself.. And I actually had a part in the story outline where he gets so thirsty, he pulls a garden hose through the window.. But it kind of ruined the momentum, so I said fuckit and defied physics. All in all I was trying to go for brevity, which actually seemed to piss a couple readers off. I learned that story length might not be a bad thing after all. I think I'm done with the pills for now. By the way, I've specifically designed a character "change" just for you in the continuing touch series. Coming soon.
BB47
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Simple, I'm not satisfied with a section of stx3 and character in touch, this little diddy helped clear my mind. Sry if it doesn't deliver.
Roid Abuser
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Oh, yeah, stop just when it was getting hot again. Thanks a bunch! ;-)
Very good, very much like the realistic, but new-and-improved couple.
Quibbles: the former MIT geek in me (yes, a gym monkey who went to MIT) worries about where the mass for all this growth comes from (an issue with most "instant" growth stories, except those invovling magic or perhaps nanites). Can't believe that's an issue to me in a dirty story, but it is. I'd expect a change in temperature or eating or some source of energy converting to matter.
BB47
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Simple, I'm not satisfied with a section of stx3 and character in touch, this little diddy helped clear my mind. Sry if it doesn't deliver.
BB47
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
BB47, I don't understand why you're trying to improve on someone else's work. I would much rather you continue with your original ideas. I loved your first two stories and I can't wait for you to continue with "The Touch".
HashTag
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
How is hyperbole like this useful? The sex scene ended too soon and my desires got deferred right out the door, the one that Timmy and his Aunt entered at the end.
Bob
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
One of the greatest I ever read, I'm not into WG but the rest is really great, hope you have more like that !
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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