A mysterious man infiltrates Katy's dorm room to try to get her to fall in love with him. Transformation of Katy and her roommate ensues.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.50
- BE: 3.00
- Characters: 3.33
- Technical: 3.50
tsokei
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Pretty well done for the erotic side- I wished for more process description or changes to happen to the same girls but it was still good.
BB47
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
It slips and slides around while you read it. At first, I found myself wishing for more background, more detail, more suspense. But, it is straight to the point and plenty sexy at certain parts. In the end, I found myself not really interested in the overall storyline... it doesn't really matter at this point. Anytime you put two, hot, sexy, superbusty chicks in a room and within two pages you have them go at each other in uncontrollable lust, I'm not really going to care much about anything other than how hot and horny you can make the scene play out.
Muhznit
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Decently hot, but it's more of "BE, sex, sex, sex, sex." Another case of "spend 1-2 paragraphs describing the expansion, then fuck." Holly's transformation isn't detailed all that much. You don't really get to hear much about the guy that transforms them, either. In fact, you hear more about the guy he's jealous of. Heck, how is this an attempt to get a girl to fall in love? It's more of "make her his sex slave". Yes I'm being a bit philosophical about it, but I just find it somewhat aggravating. The sex was moderately hot, though.
Bill
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Though I haven't finished downloading this story yet, I refuse to allow this story to get such a low rating just because some ass couldn't figure out how to open it.
Keep on truckin'
Wolf
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Very well written, interesting story! Keep it up!
Tennek
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
couldn't read it, it was all blocks
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