belle0887-stx@yahoo.com
My first foray into this type of writing. Please leave comments and suggestions. The second part will follow soon.
This is the story of Captain John Rivers as he finds himself exposed to a foreign life form aboard his deep space military freighter.
Enjoy.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.96
- BE: 3.86
- Characters: 4.79
- Technical: 4.96
Viddaric
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Yay, symbiotes! I freaking love symbiotes. Keep it up; I await your next submission with bated breath
anonymous coward
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Davion
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I'll be honest - I haven't rated a story anywhere in about four or five years, but this one caught me. As has been said - absolutely wonderful story! Please do continue this - you have a wonderful knack for writing. Can't wait to see how extreme things get, and what happens to the characters. :)
Chaos Master
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Please keep up the good work. Might want to think about giving more technical and character background. Cannot wait to see if others will become involved. PLEASE continue!!
Daiyuki
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very nice, please continue it.
l
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Your first foray? What a nice start! :)
I really liked the characterization and how things progressed... not to mention the solid writing style. Looking forward to more.
32
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
good story, i'd like to read more of it
madmacs2010
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
This is a good prelude to what could be a very good story, the plot line and character development are very well performed. I lust to think how far the doctor is going to take her BE (will she immobilize herself in an effort to impress the captain? ) and how far will the STX go, what is it's intentions, will they find a cure, will they want to find a cure, I can wait to read the next installments.
J
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Droid
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I really enjoyed reading this story, it's good writing, intriguing plot and well written characters make this one of the top BE stories I've read.
I look forward to part two!
GTB
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Fuck yes. More more more.
Kanodin
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Stainless Steel Rat
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I am liking this story so far. Please continue.
:)
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
An excellent start with good foreshadowing. Looking forward to more morphing.
Professor Grow
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Not much BE in this one, but it leaves me looking forward to the next installment. Very well done!
a
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Xevious
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very good, this is the first time I have left a quote and score for anyone. Keep on writing.
Anony-mouse
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
So well done. I can't believe this is your first story.
Mr. Justaguy
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Oh my goodness please do keep writing.
PoLyMoRf
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I don't usually comment or rate, but this story is just so well written. It reminds me of Ed Miller's Xenophobia, but with more of an actual Sci-Fi twist to it. Keep it coming, waiting for part 2
Tdean
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
VERY nice start, seem like a great start to whats gonna be a very good story.
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Was a great read, looking forward to more
Everything
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Really amazing. Here's hoping for lots more!
randomguy
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
If it were just the attention to spelling/grammar/readability, I would love it.
If it were just the attention to character description, I would love it.
If it were just the creativity of the story, I would love it.
Your story has all this and more, and I emphatically encourage you to continue this series.
miri
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very well done. I'm looking forward to the next part.
al
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
i never rate stories, but this is really good
looking forward to the next
John
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
A very enjoyable and to the point read. Left me anticipating what will happen in further chapters. While there wasn't a lot of boob growth going on in the first part, it can't be faulted because there's at least one more part to come. A perfect setup.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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