metalnazi123@yahoo.com
Mom has a dirty mind, and here son is about to see a side of his mother he has never seen before.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.67
- BE: 3.11
- Characters: 2.11
- Technical: 2.00
ButtonPopper69
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
WOW. this story was really... intense. Grammatical errors aside, BRAVO!! Thank you Metal Nazi! Patiently awaiting part 2!
Anonymous
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
I didn't enjoy it. A 15 year old? Gross.
TheNewNo2
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
If you can't be bothered to type "you" out fully, and can't write a story longer than 1.5 sides of A4.... epic fail.
flies
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 2
grammar and typos aside, I really liked this. The relationship between the mom and son was hot, and the action was getting good at the end there. Nead MOar.
big is best
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
spelling and a grammar check would make the story readable, looks like it was written by a child. Expansion not bad though.
nodspy
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Just double check the grammar and spelling next time. Love the expansion and concept. Cant wait for more.
g-man001
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 2
Needs some polish, but I would still read the chapters about the other pills. Need a little more INC represented on the site.
Dr. Kenneth Noisewater
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
That was a terrible story. You really need to improve your grammar and spelling. "U" is not a word!
Guy Incognito
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 2
For one thing, the grammar and spelling are awful. There is no character development, although the description of the expansion wasn't terrible. Spell-check your work next time. Story was half-decent.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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