masterxodin@yahoo.com
An Illustrated story about growing up as friends with a girl named Ari whom easily grows the biggest pair of breasts in both elementary and high-school. A short light-hearted feel-good story.
Story is inspired by artwork I've done for Ariane Saint Amour and includes samples as illustrations for the story and visual imagery of the breast growth.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.20
- BE: 4.20
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 3.60
Janardhan
Overall= 1, BE= 5, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
The paragon of unndrstaeding these issues is right here!
Exorban
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Didn't really like the second-person perspective nor the story itself. Glad that there was no 'actual' preg, disappointed that there were no ass or MPG. I preferred your teenage dreams story. Well, cheers and many hopes for something more to my tastes to come!
deux_anges
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Cute teenage fantasy story. Not much descriptions of the BE but plenty of actual breast and clothing descriptions, which is pretty nice in itself.
Some more preg descriptions would be nice also.
g-man001
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Enjoyed the pics and the exchange before sex. More preg is always a good thing. Second person is not a great choice and would've liked a bit more dialogue. A great start though. Keep at it!
anon
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Not a huge fan of the second-person style (use of "you"); it makes me feel like there's a character missing. Otherwise, rather well done, although there's an overall lack of conflict.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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