BE via breast implants. A socialite tries to get rich by going after an oil tycoon and exploiting his weakness for ultra huge fake boobs. But the oil tycoon has his sights set on another even bustier girl. My first BE story. Adam Plantz.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.86
- BE: 4.71
- Characters: 4.57
- Technical: 4.57
hhhbkl
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great story. Please write more like it because so few writers do implant stories
brianm
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
A superb story. Plenty of action & amazing tits! I really hope you're working on a third tale!
ubu
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
If you love BA by means of Breast Implants, read on!
deus
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Simply awesome. I can't wait for the next one!
Joey
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I love stories dealing directly with implants! I hope you'll write more!
deux_anges
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Excellent first attempt. There are currently too few BE stories involving "real" breast implants so this is very welcome.
The spelling and grammar was OK, although you did get some words mixed up (e.g. "capitol" instead of "captital"). The vocabulary was also good. The story pace was just right, not too quick but not so slow that I lost interest, there is a good buildup.
The protagonists were also quite well developed (character-wise, I mean) and believable. The plot in the fine too, although I thought the end was just a little too convenient: Boy and girl fall in love and live happily ever after.
Overall, an excellent contribution and with some improvements you could be the next Chris Helmare!
zjorz
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Looking forward to more of your stories!
OmniTrixie
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Two of your three main characters are completely unlikeable, but I'm assuming that's what you were going for and giving you credit for it. (Character backgrounds needed some work, though -- fifty billion? Really?) You really need to work on placing commas.
There's potential here. Keep going with it.
PeterBE
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Great debut. Enjoyed it very much. Really looking forward to more good stuff.
hil
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
very good story. would love a follow up.
harl
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Breasts
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great stuff.
I look forward to any more of this type that you write. :)
Kam
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
loved it! cant wait to see more of your work!
tljlf
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Excellent you are the MAN!!!!!
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