While I await the final proofing of the final A&A submission, here is a story that I wrote whilst I was deployed to Iraq in 2005. I lost this when I submitted it to a proof reader and then had a hard drive crash. I amazingly found it two days ago in my sent mail box on hotmail (obviously I don't erase that folder often).
This story hasn't been very throughly proofread, but I am submitting it as is. I am sure there are some "there should be their" and "its instead of it's" gaffs, but my read through yesterday was fairly easy.
Finally, I was in the middle of a year long deployment when I wrote this, and I might not have been totally right in the head. As such, there are subjects in it that on the recent read through, I am not very comfortable with (incest mainly, but also a brief NC scene). If you don't like those things, then don't read it.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.15
- BE: 4.15
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 4.00
icked
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
You are the worst kind of vile.
Roid Abuser
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Pure filth, but in a good way.
Didn't enjoy the mom very much, but that's just not my thing.
Excellent story, however.
maDmanDy
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
You write your grimy stories on toilet paper and then wipe with it then flush it. You are a vile person.
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Humorous and well written despite the grammar, by which I mean the narration not centered around sex or science fiction was thoughtful and believable. I enjoyed how the different plot lines were jumbled together, rather than sequentially hammered out. It felt like a natural story, only more arousing...
Nicaktheman
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I read this is story at least once a week it's so good!
Excellent work!
mandy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
flies
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
definitely one of the best stories in a long time!! lots of sex, lots of growth, lots of everything right and good. if I were to offer some constructive criticism, I would suggest that the main character stick around longer after the growth tho. It's more fun when you get to play with the giant boobies after they get so big.
great work.
Billy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
One of the best stories on the site...the best in years
Invisible Twinkie
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
This story was absolutely amazing, I look forward to more!
MrHHH
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Good story! I think were too many women though. It became difficult to keep track of who you was in a scene.
Apple
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
One of the better one submitted of late.
harl
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
fourshot
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
thanks for serving, a belated welcome back! other than ending a bit abruptly for my tastes, I think it rocked! I definately look forward to reading more of your work.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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