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Ryu continues to work his magic on the people in Bethany's life, namely her teacher and her mother.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.60
- BE: 4.60
- Characters: 4.60
- Technical: 4.80
BTC
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Can't wait to see the revenge turns out. I imagine the playing field wont be level for long!
D
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I really enjoyed the first 2 installments! I can't wait for future installments of this story!
Kailia
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
This is a pretty good series so far, keep up the good work. In response to Deus' quandary about the numbering, it appears to me that Ryu is counting down, the woman in the elevator would make for four to go, given that Melanie has already been promised. At least that's how I saw it.
deus
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Good job! I can't wait for the next part. One question though; Ryu said the woman in the elevator was going to be #4, but there were Bethany's two friends, the teacher, Bethany's mom, and then the woman in the elevator. Wouldn't that make her #5?
Russian Judge
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Another great segment of this story! You have done wonderfully with Ryu cutting a swath through the school. I also fully expected that Ryu would work his magic with the mother. Now...
...inasmuch as all these girls have increased libidos, why should they limit their attention to men only? And while Ryu has promised not to touch Bethany himself, why should the women affected by Ryu - including her mother - be off limits? It would give Bethany a chance to "try out the new equipment," so to speak, without bespoiling her virginity.
Whatever you do, thanks for a great story!
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