Characters from my past stories on The Overflowing Bra/Erotic Mind Control Archive and Fictionmania team up to star in a motion picture screenplay of my own creation- with nods to Russ Meyer, John Waters, and camp sci-fi. Just what is up with that freaky alien?
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.75
- BE: 3.50
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 3.50
Jack
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
awesome story, i usually don't like that style but you pulled it off. i hope you keep writing.
Very Free
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
I find screenplay or whatever it's called a difficult read. The author must think that the reader doesn't have enough imagination to form his own mental picture of the scene. BTW, I think the author meant train trestle, not train transom.
And the degradation and bimboization theme is being worn out. A monkey? Really?? Feh. Make that has been worn out. Beat to fuckin' hell recently, actually.
2
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 1
screenmaven
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Great job at capturing the spirit and directorial style of Russ Meyer. Missed his narration, though.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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