pakled05@hotmail.com
Well, someone asked for more...so be careful what you ask for.
This is part 2 of the Man with the Hands...so it's more centered on her story. Some BE, but some enhancements of another sort, sauce for the gander, if you will...;)
Have fun.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 3.25
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 4.25
The Doob
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
A great contribution. I would encourage you, in the future, to do two things: Take the time and effort to really flesh out your stories in terms of length as well as plot development. You've created an interesting and well-thought storyline/premise with your last two stories, but you always seem to cut yourself short.. both on the aspects of erotica that you include as well as on fully fleshing out the characters. I'm looking forward to reading future works of yours.. I sincerely hope that I see a nice lengthy piece involving these two characters in the future!
Beetlebomb
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Above Average story. Liked it very much.
What more can you give to an author than some simple, positive feedback.
cheers,
Beetlebomb
Anonymous
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Good story, although your use of bra sizes was way off, she would have been miles beyond O.
Jason G
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Well written, but short. She just left him hangin'. ;)
I think the mutual growth scene was nicely done, and can't think of a way to improve on that. Keep up the good work!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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