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While Jason and Cindy are away on Spring Break, Mary finds time to go to a psychologist, who attempts to explain the reason behind her ever-expanding bust. In the process, she gets more than a revelation...
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.50
- BE: 3.50
- Characters: 4.50
- Technical: 5.00
Very Free
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
It's getting kinkier and kinkier. Several silly boo-boos ("her blanked his blank" should be "he blanked his blank"), but surprisingly free of spelling errors. I would really like to see more detail in the BE, not just "they were now the size of pumpkins" or whatever. And this 'part' was longer than the others, it might be called a part instead of a chapter. But the others should be combined. And WHO THE FUCK IS BRUCE???
Harl
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Nice turn of the ongoing story. Keep up the good writing!
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