The Overflowing Bra

I hope my scores aren't too low because this is the first time I've bothered to review a story here.  This is the kind of story I've been looking for.  Unrestrained sexuality in young women without the girls getting dumbed down or dominated by a man.  There could have been a little more character development but I was looking for something quick and hot, but well written.  Good job! 

I must say you've done an amazingly brilliant job on this story! I've been awaiting a writer with mainly lesbian stories for a while since they are so far and few in number. Please, Please keep true to this style of writing. Your grammar was about perfect, your storyline was perfectly spaced and timed, and characters were almost perfect! I look forward to reading more of your stories as you develop them. ^_^

Well done.  I can't wait for more!

I'm going to go ahead and say that this was a good story, but there was definitely some room for improvement.  That said, it's better than most contributions have been for a while, especially for first time writers.  Kudos.

Great story and nice concept.
I just have one little nitpick though:  instead of having the character say 'Look what I found when I went to pee', maybe it should have been 'Look what I found when I went to the restroom.'  The first one was the only thing I really didn't like about the story.

I must say that I loved this story and the cliffhanger ending was great. Any chance we might see a sequel?

Good story, wish it had some more description of BE. Seems like it gets a bit busy towards the end, maybe because the paragraphs are too large and too few.  

All in all I enjoyed the story. It was particularly refreshing to read a story without grammar problems. So much so, that you've inspired me to keep working on my story.
I gave it a 3/5 overall, because other than rapid breast growth and lesbian sex, there wasn't much to the story.
4/5 on the BE because you described it well, but I felt you could go into more detail.
3/5 on the characters, because we didn't really learn much about any of them other than Nikki. As for Nikki, I thought her situation a little ridiculous. Quite literally starving and broke, but still paying for dance instead of food?
5/5 for technical because of, well, all the obvious reasons.
I'm sorry to drag your overall rating down, because it does seem like a good story, but those are my thoughts.
One thing I felt was really missing, particularly in light of your hopes of creating a new "universe," was actual haggling on the price. The shopkeeper says they can work out a price, she pays $10, and off she goes. There is disappointingly little to it. Even if you're not going for the unexpected prices of Spells R' Us, there should be something more to it. At the end of the story, she says again that they can work out a price. It seems meant to sound ominous, but given the earlier transactions ease and simplicity it just seems like an anticlimactic ending.
The only thing I can think is that the breast growth was the price, but it didn't cost the girls anything, so I have to rule that out.

Wow, let me just say thank you. It's a wonderful feeling to see only white and black text in Microsoft Word. Flawless english..... I am taken aback.
Thanks for the warning..... It made me chuckle.
Such description in the sex scenes. Many authors, myself included, seem to have a tough time giving such vivid detail.
Keep up the great work!!