It's an ordinary day in the life of love-challenged Greg, until the universe decides that he is, in fact, a female. Things quickly escalate when "Michelle"'s chest starts growing faster than Greg can keep up, among other, even more drastic changes.
Good, just not my thing.
Very well written. I love people who can write properly with very few grammatical errors. People who don't just end up distracting me from the story. I feel as though my mind is being ripped away from the fantasy world by someone using "their" instead of "there", etc.
That said; I didn't like the unrealistic pregnancy thing. 10 babies? I guess that's just not for me.
I wish there was a bit more focus on the lactation, not so much focus on the penis growth and other male growth from the male partner. I also found it somewhat difficult to keep up with the new characters entering in to the story as if they had always been there... which I realize was part of the "universe morphing reality" thing, but still it might have been better to introduce those characters first, but make them benign acquaintances that in the alternate universe are suddenly best friends, etc...
You're one of my favorite authors on this site, and this is one of my favorite stories! I like your balance of realism in how people react-while-still-being-driving-by-hormones, and the just-on-the-edge-of-impossible for the kinds of transformations that happen to people.
A peculiar story, but it was definitely different from what I'm used to reading.
I liked everything about this story except for the "reset button" ending. Still one of the best on the site, though.
one of the best ive read in a while..you hit all of my favorites
Very good! Quite enjoyable, one of the best I've read in a while....
Although I don't like all the kinks in this, the story is well written and enjoyable to read. I'm always excited to see a new Mich story.
Very awesome, usually not a fan of TG..but this story was great. Hit all my interests...keep it up!
I agree with Teri's assessment. Very few mistakes.
I just loved this story! Everything I could look for all rolled into one. There is room for some improvement, but that's just polish and nothing more. I'll make sure others read on this story, and you should try posting this on fictionmania.com.
Not a huge fan of the pregnancy side but great story regardless.
What Teri said. I'm different from the other person, really.
Could've used a bit more focus on the BE, but other than that? Good stuff.
What Teri said.
It was going so good till it went a little overboard to the realm of it ending up kinda silly. Maybe a stop at being pregnant, lactating and busty at around a EE or so? Then another person gets affected by the 'reality shift'?
Just a thought:)
Dude, that was excellent. The concept was great, sometimes no explanation is best (and the teaser laid it perfectly). The characters were relatable and the perfect depth for the length of the story. There were no extra, irrelevant details, the plot moved at good pace, and the growth was frequent. What I really liked, and I chalk this up to both writing style and characterization, the story didn't stop each time there was a sex scene, nor did the sex get repetitive and overshadow the growth. The sex was worked into the the progression of the growth and acted as a way to entice the reader for what was coming next. There was also a good amount of differentiation in the descriptions so that it wasn't just a string of ever more powerful but ultimately similar orgasms.
The plot was excellent short story form, it rose quickly, and tapered off gracefully. As short stories go, especially here, it was great. However, the BE descriptions could have been expanded just a bit. The character could have thought about/played with/focused on them just a tad more. As it were, there was a good balance in growth areas, but the rating is BE, and that got just a little lost.
Thus, 4 overall (for there is no 4.5). This was great and I'm sure you can make the next just as good. The reason (or lack there of) worked well enough that you could go with it again in a different setting and it wouldn't seem too repetitive.