Jake is accidentally hit with a strange new chemical. What new things does this mean for the young scientist? This is my second attempt at writing. This is much better written then my first attempt. If you like it let me know, I will add more chapters.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.23
- BE: 3.15
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 3.92
Nemo
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
Good start, but you need to slow it down some and add detail. By the end of the story we don't know very much about who the main characters really are as people and their backgrounds. For the erotic content, details details details. The more the merrier. In the case of grammar make sure you set off all dialogue with quotes to make it easy to read and flowing. Overall I like this story and I see alot of potential with it.
Slack
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Really would have enjoyed more detail on both the BE and PE but it's still a decent story.
Bodacious
Overall= 4, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
A vast improvement from your last story. Well done! My only criticism is that it reads a bit unevenly - some aspects get terrific, artful descriptions, while other details get glossed over very quickly. Since some of those details include the BE, I'd love to see more time spent there! Looking forward to the next installment!
middleagednerd
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Just HOW did his body change? Details, please...
shelby
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
deus
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I can't wait for the next part!
alrius
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
not long enough otherwise a very good story ( basically i want more)
Very Free
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Only a couple dozen goofs, mostly punctuation. I think the past tense of thrust is thrust, not thrusted. Good word though. I think the story could use a bit more elaboration especially at the end, where it seems to terminate suddenly. More BE, too.
The Medley
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Really good story cant wait to hear more. Not much BE untill the end but most good stories have a plot before rampid sex.
Professor Grow
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I enjoyed this quite a lot. I'm looking forward to seeing if more changes hit them in the sequel...
G-man001
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Don't be so hurried with the descriptions, but would definitely like to see more!
wildcard
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I really loved the story, there was only one things that could have bin better. The tornado leveled the lab, but the car was still there? It didn't get blown away? How about the area around the lab, what damage was caused by the tornado.
Alot of drama could have bin added to the story if more details where given of what the tornado caused to the area.
So besides that the story went from surviving a tornado to lets have dinner, I liked the rest of it. Well detailed, likeable characters and good solid description.
Evil Spants
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Excellent story! I would certainly see what happens next between them, and how they change their bodies!
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